Almost There

They looked at each other from across the room,

Exhaustion reeked from their messed up hair.

He quietly walked out to find the broom,

She slouched back, drowning further into the living room couch.

While her mind ran despite how tired it was,

His arms worked hard despite how heavy they felt.

Cleaning the mess never felt tougher,

Neither her sharp mind nor his strong shoulders.

A soft scream escaped his lips,

a sharp piece of something broken cut into his foot.

She was by his side in a few seconds,

Helping him, mothering him, tending to his wound.

Yet the wound was too deep this time,

The words too sharp.

They sat together on the floor and looked around,

9 years, 137 days, 2 hours and 12 minutes.

The promise to cross the ultimate finish line of life together loomed overhead,

Their intertwined fingers finding it hard to keep them together.

She smiled,

He smiled,

Their hearts sighed.

—–xxx——

I wrote this poem in 2019 for a competition but never submitted it because I felt like it wasn’t good enough. πŸ™ˆ It isn’t necessarily supposed to be sad, the poem is just about knowing when to give up on things that aren’t working out. Reposting this today since I randomly found this while going through my archives. Hope you like it! ❀️ Happy weekend!

27 Comments Add yours

  1. Shelly DS says:

    Geez how on earth can you think this isn’t good enough? It’s brilliant!

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  2. akshita1776 says:

    Phenomenal. The way you described it, I could see it all happening in front of me

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  3. Beautiful🌺

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  4. nushhe says:

    I loved the theme of the poem!! πŸ‘ŒπŸ»πŸ‘ŒπŸ» It’s nice

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  5. Nehal Jain says:

    Wow, rbjs was lovely 😍, why the hell did you not submit it!? The imagery is just whoa!!!!
    Also, just to confirm, they are both on the verge of death at the end, right? Like I don’t want to have interpreted it wrong 😬

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    1. Nehal Jain says:

      I meant this was lovely, not rbjs πŸ˜‚. Typos πŸ˜…

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  6. Kripaa says:

    It’s fantastic πŸ™Œ

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  7. So emotional, I felt it. Thank you for sharing πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”

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  8. It’s a beautiful poem, I’m glad you decided to share it πŸ™‚

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  9. vaniheart says:

    This is so emotional and true for many relationships ❀❀❀
    Sometimes love is not enough πŸ’”
    Beautifully written πŸ‘ ❀

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  10. Nivithasri says:

    I loved this!!πŸ₯Ίβ£οΈ

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    1. Happy Panda says:

      Aww, thank you ❀

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      1. Nivithasri says:

        You’re welcome πŸ₯°

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  11. I think you were going to win the competition. You’ve always been good with words

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    1. Happy Panda says:

      Awww, thank you so much, love! ❀

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      1. You are welcomeπŸ₯°πŸ₯°πŸ₯°

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  12. How beautifully you have penned down the emotions in every line!
    And who says this is not good enough, it’s way too amazing <3. Do share them often.

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  13. You should have definitely submitted it. It’s great! Sometimes, we can be our worst critics!

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  14. Sonali says:

    I think you should have submitted it. But at least you let this beautiful piece see the light now! Beautiful poem dear β™₯β™₯

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  15. BookWorm says:

    This poem is do deep and true! I absolutely loved it πŸ™‚

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  16. utahan15 says:

    love like that
    is fiction
    to a man
    whose diction
    is too unreal
    not real
    nor how i feel quite often!

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  17. Aayushi Sahu says:

    it’s beautiful β™₯️

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  18. I think about this sometimes. When is it okay to give up and when do we have to keep pushing?

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    1. Happy Panda says:

      Me too. Especially when I’m struggling with something. I was thinking about this from a business context the other day – how do businesses decide to shut shop? I mean how do they decide that they can’t push it along anymore?

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      1. Same! I learn about some of the finest restaurants that were broke for seven years until they got a breakthrough. Wow.

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  19. The gist of healing & being happy!
    Great poetry!

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